Karma
Heart Attack
this is an audition thread for Sinosleep. the purpose of this thread is for him to get a taste of playing in a "Six" scenario and to gauge his ability to play logically, creatively and with flair
Audition thread- Sinosleep
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sinosleep
Rising Star
SinoSleep - Miracle
Name: Miracle
Occupation: DemonHunter
Base of Operation: Unknown
Known Relatives:Father (deceased) Mother (deceased) Brother (Marc Creel), Brother (Mathew Creel)
Gender: Male
Height: 6 '6
Weight: 210
Eyes: none
Hair: Bald
Physical Appearance:
Has no eyes and normally has a fully grown out beard. Normally wears black robes with a heavy, hooded, brown cloak over them. Carrie's a staff to help him focus his spells and usually has a crucifix wrapped around his left arm.
History:
Creel was the most recent in a long line of demon hunters. The firt born male of the Creel clan had always been born with the power of inate good luck and been inducted into demon hunting since 12th century. Usually starting by having their eyes plucked out at the age of six, in order to avoid the pitfalls of lusts and greed that eyeing other's possessions could cuase.
Jonas had hunted demons on his own for his entire life but felt that his talents would be best put to use with the Avengers. With the fall of the original avengers came a new age of evil, not only super powered beings, but demons and the like as well. Even with his vast array of mystical powers he's been having an extremely hard time fighting back the demons that continue to come in larger and larger numbers. With the Avengers at his side, he'll be better prepared to handle them and in return can offer his healing abilities to the team.
Power:
1. Luck Powers
2. Vast knowledge of dark magics and spells
3. Vast knowledge of healing magics and spells
4. Knows latins and several demonic tongues
(always has a "detect evil" type spell active that allows him to see evil people/creatures very clearly in a red hue, where to see good people he has to concentrate harder and they appear as bluish outlines without nearly as much detail.
now in possession of
Runo Stafr alone- enables wielder to fly and erect a magic energy shield
Fire enabled- can shoot fire, put fires out, wielder impervious to fire.
Earth enabled- can summon a Golem to fight for you, can cause minor tremors in a 20 degree cone in front of you, distance determined by experience.
Water enabled- able to manipulate water in some degree like Njord does with the wind. The amount will depend on experience.
Air enabled- can create cold air shockwaves that can topple or possibly freeze foes, enhances the flight power normally found with the staff.
Spirit enabled- can turn or damage undead, can detect evil, can shine light of penance upon foes, exposing them to their inner sins.
Name: Miracle
Occupation: DemonHunter
Base of Operation: Unknown
Known Relatives:Father (deceased) Mother (deceased) Brother (Marc Creel), Brother (Mathew Creel)
Gender: Male
Height: 6 '6
Weight: 210
Eyes: none
Hair: Bald
Physical Appearance:
Has no eyes and normally has a fully grown out beard. Normally wears black robes with a heavy, hooded, brown cloak over them. Carrie's a staff to help him focus his spells and usually has a crucifix wrapped around his left arm.
History:
Creel was the most recent in a long line of demon hunters. The firt born male of the Creel clan had always been born with the power of inate good luck and been inducted into demon hunting since 12th century. Usually starting by having their eyes plucked out at the age of six, in order to avoid the pitfalls of lusts and greed that eyeing other's possessions could cuase.
Jonas had hunted demons on his own for his entire life but felt that his talents would be best put to use with the Avengers. With the fall of the original avengers came a new age of evil, not only super powered beings, but demons and the like as well. Even with his vast array of mystical powers he's been having an extremely hard time fighting back the demons that continue to come in larger and larger numbers. With the Avengers at his side, he'll be better prepared to handle them and in return can offer his healing abilities to the team.
Power:
1. Luck Powers
2. Vast knowledge of dark magics and spells
3. Vast knowledge of healing magics and spells
4. Knows latins and several demonic tongues
(always has a "detect evil" type spell active that allows him to see evil people/creatures very clearly in a red hue, where to see good people he has to concentrate harder and they appear as bluish outlines without nearly as much detail.
now in possession of
Runo Stafr alone- enables wielder to fly and erect a magic energy shield
Fire enabled- can shoot fire, put fires out, wielder impervious to fire.
Earth enabled- can summon a Golem to fight for you, can cause minor tremors in a 20 degree cone in front of you, distance determined by experience.
Water enabled- able to manipulate water in some degree like Njord does with the wind. The amount will depend on experience.
Air enabled- can create cold air shockwaves that can topple or possibly freeze foes, enhances the flight power normally found with the staff.
Spirit enabled- can turn or damage undead, can detect evil, can shine light of penance upon foes, exposing them to their inner sins.
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Foxfire
Unique character bio. I especially like the idea of a character without "eyes", I don't recall ever seeing that. Nice creativity.
Harbinger
Keeper of Time
and so it begins
:: A foggy evening in NYC. traffic and pedestrian activity is minimal as a fog hangs low around the upper east side of manhattan. Alison Marble sits quietly in her master bedroom of her loft on the 106th floor of Illustra...in a meditating position, she floats above a pentagram that flickers of a blue hued flame. Her cobalt blue eyes are now glowing solid white as she uses the tranquility and darkness as an opportunity to reach out with her long range fore sight.::
::thinking:: a mage is near....and not of this area, or this time even. he wields a talisman of great power, power that he wields like a CLUMSY FOOL.
:: prior to joining the Six, Alison Marble traveled the world over, exploring the highest peaks and the darkeset caverns learning the scerets of the darkest magicks known to man. She trained with some of most powerfull mages , many of whom were believed to be "fictional characters" by the general populace. she has had personal adventures that would make MILITARY men cower in fear...and tonight, she would return to that mode as she would wrest control of this talisman from this strange new mage....this man who was in the wrong time and space. ::
:: A foggy evening in NYC. traffic and pedestrian activity is minimal as a fog hangs low around the upper east side of manhattan. Alison Marble sits quietly in her master bedroom of her loft on the 106th floor of Illustra...in a meditating position, she floats above a pentagram that flickers of a blue hued flame. Her cobalt blue eyes are now glowing solid white as she uses the tranquility and darkness as an opportunity to reach out with her long range fore sight.::
::thinking:: a mage is near....and not of this area, or this time even. he wields a talisman of great power, power that he wields like a CLUMSY FOOL.
:: prior to joining the Six, Alison Marble traveled the world over, exploring the highest peaks and the darkeset caverns learning the scerets of the darkest magicks known to man. She trained with some of most powerfull mages , many of whom were believed to be "fictional characters" by the general populace. she has had personal adventures that would make MILITARY men cower in fear...and tonight, she would return to that mode as she would wrest control of this talisman from this strange new mage....this man who was in the wrong time and space. ::
sinosleep
Rising Star
“Your night is done foul creature!” Miracle screamed while using the earth rune slotted Runo Stafr to create a tremor in the ground causing the demon 10 feet in front of him to lose it’s footing. Using it’s stumble to his advantage Miracle quickly shouted, “Concedo furva flamma!” Almost instantaneously black flames surrounded in a bluish hue engulfed the creature.
It stumbled forward, realizing these flames were something altogether different then the fires it lived in comfortably as it’s skin bubbled and broke leaving it in great pain. Sensing victory Miracle let his guard down as he approached the slowly flailing demon unaware that it was readying its final spell.
Just as he reached the distance where he could turn the beast over with his staff to ensure it was dead it suddenly rolled to it’s side releasing a bolt of energy inches from his feet sending dirt and grass in all directions. Before it had made it much more then a couple of feet into the air the very same dirt and grass was sucked through the void that now took it’s place, quickly followed by Miracle.
Only his good luck had allowed Miracle to live, and he would have to depend on it to survive in the new place and time where he found himself.
It stumbled forward, realizing these flames were something altogether different then the fires it lived in comfortably as it’s skin bubbled and broke leaving it in great pain. Sensing victory Miracle let his guard down as he approached the slowly flailing demon unaware that it was readying its final spell.
Just as he reached the distance where he could turn the beast over with his staff to ensure it was dead it suddenly rolled to it’s side releasing a bolt of energy inches from his feet sending dirt and grass in all directions. Before it had made it much more then a couple of feet into the air the very same dirt and grass was sucked through the void that now took it’s place, quickly followed by Miracle.
Only his good luck had allowed Miracle to live, and he would have to depend on it to survive in the new place and time where he found himself.
Harbinger
Keeper of Time
:: a could, sharp voice is heard through the fog::
you wield your power like a novice.
::a popping sound is heard as a pair of disembodied cobalt blue eyes open in the air in the midst of the fog. the glare at the mage with an unforgiving stare::
it is dangerous to come into a time and space which you are not familiar with.
:: Guardian BLINKS into view, wearing her trademark sleek one shoulder body suit with high heeled boots and gloves. her blue/black hair is up in a stylish, functional up do::
Identify yourself , explain your purpose here.
:: the seer's mind was completely closed to any form of telepathic/mental probing or domination and her stone cold presence suggested that she was not one for pleasantries. she stood tall and poised as well.::
you wield your power like a novice.
::a popping sound is heard as a pair of disembodied cobalt blue eyes open in the air in the midst of the fog. the glare at the mage with an unforgiving stare::
it is dangerous to come into a time and space which you are not familiar with.
:: Guardian BLINKS into view, wearing her trademark sleek one shoulder body suit with high heeled boots and gloves. her blue/black hair is up in a stylish, functional up do::
Identify yourself , explain your purpose here.
:: the seer's mind was completely closed to any form of telepathic/mental probing or domination and her stone cold presence suggested that she was not one for pleasantries. she stood tall and poised as well.::
sinosleep
Rising Star
Miracle “looked” around, unaware of the fog but seeing the redish/blue tint of person in front of him replied, “I have no purpose here, I was banished to this place by the final spell of a demon I thought dead. It has been a long while since the last time I saw a person whose nature is a conflicted as yours appears to be young one.”
Harbinger
Keeper of Time
::irritated by the condescending nature of this mage, Guardian spoke with a more forcefull tone::
young though i may be, stranger, I know MORE than you can ever possibly imagine in this or ANY timeline. I "see" more than you'll ever know. and do not think that your magicks are all that there is.
:: she stepped forward, detecing the presence of magick around her...magick that wasnt her own. her marble hard heart and psi screen held firm against ALL attempts to discover what lies beneath::
trying to probe my mind and soul will availa you NOTHING for i can BLOCK all such attempts.
:: gesturing ala Prue Halliwell as she waved her hand, a rushing chiming sound is heard as she TK's Miracle across the way and into a parked car::
I do not take kindly to strangers tresspassing on Illustra's property, especially those who foolishly believe that their limited understanding of MAGICK is the end all/be all.
young though i may be, stranger, I know MORE than you can ever possibly imagine in this or ANY timeline. I "see" more than you'll ever know. and do not think that your magicks are all that there is.
:: she stepped forward, detecing the presence of magick around her...magick that wasnt her own. her marble hard heart and psi screen held firm against ALL attempts to discover what lies beneath::
trying to probe my mind and soul will availa you NOTHING for i can BLOCK all such attempts.
:: gesturing ala Prue Halliwell as she waved her hand, a rushing chiming sound is heard as she TK's Miracle across the way and into a parked car::
I do not take kindly to strangers tresspassing on Illustra's property, especially those who foolishly believe that their limited understanding of MAGICK is the end all/be all.
sinosleep
Rising Star
Before Miracle could explain that he wanted no part in the fight this woman seemed so anxious to have he felt himself being lifted into the air and forcefully sent flying backwards. Luckily for him his staff’s shield shield was activated, saving him from a very painful impact with the car he had just careened into, resulting in just enough force being transferred through to cause him to loose his footing but not feel any real pain.
He got up hitting the notch on his staff and depositing the earth, air, and fire stones into his left hand while maintaining his grip on his staff with his left. “I do not wish to fight you girl, but alas you struck first.”
With that he charged forward, rearing his arm back, sparks of electricity trickling from his knuckles to his forearm as he mumbled the words, “Concedo fulgor.”
Upon their completion he let loose with a blast of lighting while at the same time using the earth stone in his hand to summon Golem several times larger then any man could ever be behind her. He hoped that one attack would distract her from the other enabling him to end the fight as painlessly as possible.
He got up hitting the notch on his staff and depositing the earth, air, and fire stones into his left hand while maintaining his grip on his staff with his left. “I do not wish to fight you girl, but alas you struck first.”
With that he charged forward, rearing his arm back, sparks of electricity trickling from his knuckles to his forearm as he mumbled the words, “Concedo fulgor.”
Upon their completion he let loose with a blast of lighting while at the same time using the earth stone in his hand to summon Golem several times larger then any man could ever be behind her. He hoped that one attack would distract her from the other enabling him to end the fight as painlessly as possible.
Harbinger
Keeper of Time
:: her facial expression did not change. clearly his talisman would be a substantial part of his battle tactics, something she would have to change soon enough::
:: the mage rushed forward and unleashed a powerfull blast of lightning, and at the same time a giant earthen GOLEM appeared behind her, but clearly this man had no idea who he was dealing with.::
fool! to think that your elementary tactics can hem ME in?
:: moving with the speed of thought, and the clarity of a Seer, Guardian BLINKS from where she stands. the bolt of lightning BLASTS the Golem instead and Guardian HERSELF appears BEHIND the Golem::
THIS is what i think of paltry conjurings!
:: thrusting both her hands foward ala' Piper Halliwell and unleashed her power of "molecular acceleration" against the massive earthen creature....the creature EXPLODES violently....but going a step further.. Guardian "freezes" the jagged stone fragments via "temporal stasis"::
You are WAY out of your league...and FOOLISH to think that you can over power ME!
:: thrusting her gloved hands forward again...the stone fragments now HURL at him with such speed and force...before circling around him and striking him at all sides::
:: the mage rushed forward and unleashed a powerfull blast of lightning, and at the same time a giant earthen GOLEM appeared behind her, but clearly this man had no idea who he was dealing with.::
fool! to think that your elementary tactics can hem ME in?
:: moving with the speed of thought, and the clarity of a Seer, Guardian BLINKS from where she stands. the bolt of lightning BLASTS the Golem instead and Guardian HERSELF appears BEHIND the Golem::
THIS is what i think of paltry conjurings!
:: thrusting both her hands foward ala' Piper Halliwell and unleashed her power of "molecular acceleration" against the massive earthen creature....the creature EXPLODES violently....but going a step further.. Guardian "freezes" the jagged stone fragments via "temporal stasis"::
You are WAY out of your league...and FOOLISH to think that you can over power ME!
:: thrusting her gloved hands forward again...the stone fragments now HURL at him with such speed and force...before circling around him and striking him at all sides::
sinosleep
Rising Star
Surprised by the woman’s prowess Miracle hardly had time to think before his golem had been destroyed and its fragments were launched back towards him, but being as he had used the stone and not a spell the required an incantation he too could move in this instance at the speed of thought. As soon as he realized what the woman fighting him was going to do he simply unsummoned the golem, and it’s accompanying pieces.
“It appears I may have underestimated you, but judging from your speech you have done the same!”
Mumbling, “Visum abrogo,” Miracle rendered himself invisible. He knew now how quick she could be so he decided to try an altogether different tactic. Instead of casting something at her, he would simply cast it ON her. Resorting to his darker side, he spoke the words, “Concedo furva flamma.”
Upon their completion the same black flames that he regularly used to vanquish demons began to appear on the woman in front of him, not burning through the flesh but instead designed to singe her very soul.
“Yield woman, do NOT make me escelate this further!”
“It appears I may have underestimated you, but judging from your speech you have done the same!”
Mumbling, “Visum abrogo,” Miracle rendered himself invisible. He knew now how quick she could be so he decided to try an altogether different tactic. Instead of casting something at her, he would simply cast it ON her. Resorting to his darker side, he spoke the words, “Concedo furva flamma.”
Upon their completion the same black flames that he regularly used to vanquish demons began to appear on the woman in front of him, not burning through the flesh but instead designed to singe her very soul.
“Yield woman, do NOT make me escelate this further!”
Harbinger
Keeper of Time
HECATE!!!!
:: Guardian's body jolts with pain....a deep, violating pain. HE is attempting to strike her at the core of her SOUL. too bad that even HE doesnt know how BLACK her marble hard heart is....she abandonned her own FAMILY, and has KILLED without thought, without reservation. Giving herself over to the pursuit of total knowledge and understanding of dark magick::
:: she fights the spell with her tremendous inner strength....gritting her teeth as she hisses with contempt::
you .....will REGRET THIS!
:: bent over...but refusing to fall from pain...Guardian's cobalt blue eyes began to glow::
:: a haunting bell tolls in the foggy night air as Guardian ignitites dark magick::
Guardian of Evil, I call upon your power
Your wrath, you will now let loose
Reflect their spell, making them cower
Their actions do now become their noose!
:: a ray of BLACK LIGHT beams down around Guardian....followed by a swirling haze of sparkling dark shards of magick....the swirling haze STREAKS across from Guardian to MIRACLE as his own spell and its designed effect is turned BACK against HIM and HIS soul with TWICE the power it was ignited with.::
:: Guardian now stands full errect with her gloved hand out stretched::
and just to make SURE you can't escape...
STAFF
::at that moment, Guardian waves her hand and TELEBLINKS the staff from Miracle's grasp as it becomes enveloped in dark glowing orbs....hurling it FAR away from him::
:: Guardian's body jolts with pain....a deep, violating pain. HE is attempting to strike her at the core of her SOUL. too bad that even HE doesnt know how BLACK her marble hard heart is....she abandonned her own FAMILY, and has KILLED without thought, without reservation. Giving herself over to the pursuit of total knowledge and understanding of dark magick::
:: she fights the spell with her tremendous inner strength....gritting her teeth as she hisses with contempt::
you .....will REGRET THIS!
:: bent over...but refusing to fall from pain...Guardian's cobalt blue eyes began to glow::
:: a haunting bell tolls in the foggy night air as Guardian ignitites dark magick::
Guardian of Evil, I call upon your power
Your wrath, you will now let loose
Reflect their spell, making them cower
Their actions do now become their noose!
:: a ray of BLACK LIGHT beams down around Guardian....followed by a swirling haze of sparkling dark shards of magick....the swirling haze STREAKS across from Guardian to MIRACLE as his own spell and its designed effect is turned BACK against HIM and HIS soul with TWICE the power it was ignited with.::
:: Guardian now stands full errect with her gloved hand out stretched::
and just to make SURE you can't escape...
STAFF
::at that moment, Guardian waves her hand and TELEBLINKS the staff from Miracle's grasp as it becomes enveloped in dark glowing orbs....hurling it FAR away from him::
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sinosleep
Rising Star
Once again surprised by how quickly she had turned the tables on him Miracle collapsed to his knees, his concentration broken and his invisibility spell no longer in effect gave her the chance to take his staff away from him but he wasn’t done yet.
“You…..may have…….turned the…….spell, but I….still….control…..it,” he sputtered from his knees before managing to unsummon the flames.
He crawled towards his adversary, slowly gathering the strength to rise to one knee; his head still hunched low on his frame from the after effects of his spell being sent back towards him. Thankful that he had had the presence of mind to remove three of his rune stones from his staff and place them in his hand at the beginning of the battle he used them in combination to launch his next attack.
From his knees, and hopefully close enough that she would not be able to escape the freezing winds from his air stone, he used it in combination with the fire stone to send out a towering wave of flame in her direction at breakneck speed. There was no need to fear reversal of the spell this time as the fire stone afforded him immunity to it.
“You…..may have…….turned the…….spell, but I….still….control…..it,” he sputtered from his knees before managing to unsummon the flames.
He crawled towards his adversary, slowly gathering the strength to rise to one knee; his head still hunched low on his frame from the after effects of his spell being sent back towards him. Thankful that he had had the presence of mind to remove three of his rune stones from his staff and place them in his hand at the beginning of the battle he used them in combination to launch his next attack.
From his knees, and hopefully close enough that she would not be able to escape the freezing winds from his air stone, he used it in combination with the fire stone to send out a towering wave of flame in her direction at breakneck speed. There was no need to fear reversal of the spell this time as the fire stone afforded him immunity to it.
Harbinger
Keeper of Time
:: the tenacity of the man was remarkable. he was not as weak as he LOOKED::
:: she eyed him with a glare as he crawled towards her. though she had effectively disarmed him, he managed to retain three of his runes. using one to unleash an attack of icy winds. as her hair began to blow back from the wind, She could FEEL the cold, unforgiving slice of the winds and was instantly reminded of SPELLBINDER'S wind attacks and how similar this was to that. but there was one problem. the WINDS were STILL composed of MATTER.::
::Standing still and posed as if to pretend being immobilized, Guardian's cobalt eyes began to glow as she WRESTED control of these winds...seizing them with her own telekinetic power and bending them....sideways from her. She could EASILY escape any PHYSICAL entrapment via "BLINKING" , not to mention anticipate any move he would make, but why bother EVADING when you can CRUSH you foe?::
:: the wall of flame came toward her....::
you should save your tricks for children at carnivals, you novice magician.
:: throwing her gloved hands out and forward , palms faced out in a "stop" gesture, Guardian unleashes another aspect of her power...."TRUE FREEZING" the wave of fire as the wave itself is STOPPED in time...and begins to turn into PURE ICE as it is now frozen in FACT as well as in TIME. the wave becomes so BRITTLE that it begans to crumble and fall down around the area.::
and now i think its time for you to know what FEAR tastes like!
:fdevil:
:: extending gloved hand her hand toward him::
HEART!
:: a BLACK halo of dark magick forms around her hand...swirling dark orbs flow around the orb as Guardian begins to TUG at Miracle's heart...toying with him before she will actually TELEBLINK it from his chest cavity and outside his body::
:: she eyed him with a glare as he crawled towards her. though she had effectively disarmed him, he managed to retain three of his runes. using one to unleash an attack of icy winds. as her hair began to blow back from the wind, She could FEEL the cold, unforgiving slice of the winds and was instantly reminded of SPELLBINDER'S wind attacks and how similar this was to that. but there was one problem. the WINDS were STILL composed of MATTER.::
::Standing still and posed as if to pretend being immobilized, Guardian's cobalt eyes began to glow as she WRESTED control of these winds...seizing them with her own telekinetic power and bending them....sideways from her. She could EASILY escape any PHYSICAL entrapment via "BLINKING" , not to mention anticipate any move he would make, but why bother EVADING when you can CRUSH you foe?::
:: the wall of flame came toward her....::
you should save your tricks for children at carnivals, you novice magician.
:: throwing her gloved hands out and forward , palms faced out in a "stop" gesture, Guardian unleashes another aspect of her power...."TRUE FREEZING" the wave of fire as the wave itself is STOPPED in time...and begins to turn into PURE ICE as it is now frozen in FACT as well as in TIME. the wave becomes so BRITTLE that it begans to crumble and fall down around the area.::
and now i think its time for you to know what FEAR tastes like!
:fdevil:
:: extending gloved hand her hand toward him::
HEART!
:: a BLACK halo of dark magick forms around her hand...swirling dark orbs flow around the orb as Guardian begins to TUG at Miracle's heart...toying with him before she will actually TELEBLINK it from his chest cavity and outside his body::
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sinosleep
Rising Star
Miracle crumbled to the ground clutching at his chest as the woman toyed with him; he would make her pay for that. As he had done earlier with the black flames Miracle concentrated as hard as he could on focusing his next spell to appear INSIDE her body.
He had done the same with giants in Asgard resulting in boiled innards and a dead giant, and although they were much bigger targets his life was not in line as it was now. He knew that he could hold back no longer. He gestured towards her with his hand, still firmly holding the fire stone. Hoping against hope that her insides would soon burst into flames.
He had done the same with giants in Asgard resulting in boiled innards and a dead giant, and although they were much bigger targets his life was not in line as it was now. He knew that he could hold back no longer. He gestured towards her with his hand, still firmly holding the fire stone. Hoping against hope that her insides would soon burst into flames.
Harbinger
Keeper of Time
:: Guardian's cobalt blue eyes WIDEN as her precognition ANTICIPATES his next attack...potentially FATAL! the fire reaches out....attempting to IGNITE HER::
NO!!
:She should have destroyed him by teleblinking his heart from his body, but she made a slight misstep. departing from the brutal efficiency she was known for. A mistake she would NOT make again when dealing with this resilient and resourcefull mage.::
::Reacting JUST AS HE DID, she STOPS HIM in time. placing HIM in temporal stasis as well as his attempt at energy projection. stepping back and breathing heavily as she rests her hand on her chest looking at the man who was now frozen in time::
I should have killed you BEFORE, stranger. perhaps i showed mercy because you ARE a fellow magick user, a pity that i could not have met you under better circumstances. your talismans are as unique as they are powerfull. but they, along with you will be DUST!
:: thrusting her hands forward violently, Guardian returns the attempted "favor" on Miracle's part as she uses her power of "molecular acceleration" to BLAST Miracle's body and blow HIM UP in a violent ballistic explosion...leaving nothing but dust and ash behind.::
and that takes care of THAT!
:: walking forward...she steps on the pile of ash that was once Miracle...grinding it into the ground with her stiletto high heeled boot.::
BASTARD.
NO!!
:She should have destroyed him by teleblinking his heart from his body, but she made a slight misstep. departing from the brutal efficiency she was known for. A mistake she would NOT make again when dealing with this resilient and resourcefull mage.::
::Reacting JUST AS HE DID, she STOPS HIM in time. placing HIM in temporal stasis as well as his attempt at energy projection. stepping back and breathing heavily as she rests her hand on her chest looking at the man who was now frozen in time::
I should have killed you BEFORE, stranger. perhaps i showed mercy because you ARE a fellow magick user, a pity that i could not have met you under better circumstances. your talismans are as unique as they are powerfull. but they, along with you will be DUST!
:: thrusting her hands forward violently, Guardian returns the attempted "favor" on Miracle's part as she uses her power of "molecular acceleration" to BLAST Miracle's body and blow HIM UP in a violent ballistic explosion...leaving nothing but dust and ash behind.::
and that takes care of THAT!
:: walking forward...she steps on the pile of ash that was once Miracle...grinding it into the ground with her stiletto high heeled boot.::
BASTARD.
Karma
Heart Attack
Critique
Allright guys, thats a WRAP! :nod:
I'd like to thank sinosleep and Guardian for their participation in this audition.
Clearly Guardian was "going easy" on you, as this was an audition
here is my critique:
Sinosleep, for starters, the character Miracle is VERY unique, from the codename to the physical description (and one major physical handicap) to the powers and talismans he uses. I know that this character is VERY under estimated in the Avengers RPG (i saw it for myself) and its unforunate because magick users have the greatest range and potential but too often it is assumed that "magick user= weak fighter". we have TWO characters in The Six who have obliterated that stereotype. Myself and Guardian. I hope that youll be able to use them as a point of reference and maybe even some inspiration as you further develope this character.
The basic character set up for Miracle is good, but it could be fleshed out in a number of ways beginning with his back story, his physical appearence, personality profile and the details of his powers and how they manifest. the talismans are okay as they are...as they are objects designed to enhance a person's overall arsenal. But by fleshing out his bio and giving more detail to those final aspects..you can fine tune him and make him appear more powerfull and more effective than what he is given credit for in the Avengers rpg. a character is only as good and will only be taken as serious as you present them. it helps to put a "little piece" of your own personality traits into the character...after all youll play a character you identify with alot easier than you will playing a role someone ELSE tells you to play. the range you have for the use of your powers is only as open to creativity as you make it.
fighting style- Miracle uses latin incantations for the spells he ignites, as well as his talismans. be carefull NOT to use his talismans as the "bread and butter" of your fighting arsenal. Guardian EASILY disarmed you of that and had you not had several of your runes on your person, what would you have done then? try to build up more of a catalogue of "spells" for him to ignite as well as giving him some magickal effects such as "mystic force bolts with a high level of concussive power" ..things that DONT require a spell to be cast.
ALSO, give the character a sense of hand to hand combat or at least a whip, a set of daggers. he needs to be able to be fast on his feet and able to fight up close and personal..not just with magick. he could carry a potion that augments strength (i can give you a work up for that potion if you want) to give him more "power" in his physical attacks. you're a military man so incorporate your own fighting knowledge into the character to make him more formidable in hand to hand combat.
and finally PERSONALITY- again... a character has to be known for more than his powers. what makes Miracle stand out from any other magick user? In the Six , my character Spellbinder is the "powerfull, lethal edged witch who hides her emotional core " and Guardian's character is the "cold, brutal , efficicent witch who makes people wonder if she even HAS emotions." Both women are similar but posses KEY differences that help them to stand out as do ALL the members of the Six. Again..this is the chance for you to make this character in a way that you will "care" about them and WANT to use them. dont make a character to suit OTHER people's ideas...do it for YOUR pleasure.
When you play in an rpg such as "The Six" where there is so much room for personal creativity, there also comes witht hat a responsibility for you to USE that creativity and show initiative when playing your character so that you add something to the game that cant be replaced and make yourself valuable to the team in such a way that your absence is noted. You must know what is going on in the game, read up on the past stories, and bios of all your cast mates, know their abilities so you may be able to do something like a "tag team" with a team mate when fighting a foe based on the powers of the team mate you choose, or you might be able to discover a clever "round about way" of defeating a foe using logic, creativity and imagination. You dont need to wait on the direction of a "GM"(gaming director/master) to maximize your character or expand on ideas you have about your character, NOR should you have to be told WHEN/HOW to post.. and i think you defiantely were "limited" in the use of Miracle in this audition because you werent used to having as much FREEDOM to use the charater and maximize his potential.
Ultimately, I like Miracle (as did at least one other member who gave you a good karma rating in your first post). He's unique, and has alot of potential all he needs is to be "fleshed out" in some areas.
Thank you for participating in this audition
Allright guys, thats a WRAP! :nod:
I'd like to thank sinosleep and Guardian for their participation in this audition.
Clearly Guardian was "going easy" on you, as this was an audition here is my critique:
Sinosleep, for starters, the character Miracle is VERY unique, from the codename to the physical description (and one major physical handicap) to the powers and talismans he uses. I know that this character is VERY under estimated in the Avengers RPG (i saw it for myself) and its unforunate because magick users have the greatest range and potential but too often it is assumed that "magick user= weak fighter". we have TWO characters in The Six who have obliterated that stereotype. Myself and Guardian. I hope that youll be able to use them as a point of reference and maybe even some inspiration as you further develope this character.
The basic character set up for Miracle is good, but it could be fleshed out in a number of ways beginning with his back story, his physical appearence, personality profile and the details of his powers and how they manifest. the talismans are okay as they are...as they are objects designed to enhance a person's overall arsenal. But by fleshing out his bio and giving more detail to those final aspects..you can fine tune him and make him appear more powerfull and more effective than what he is given credit for in the Avengers rpg. a character is only as good and will only be taken as serious as you present them. it helps to put a "little piece" of your own personality traits into the character...after all youll play a character you identify with alot easier than you will playing a role someone ELSE tells you to play. the range you have for the use of your powers is only as open to creativity as you make it.
fighting style- Miracle uses latin incantations for the spells he ignites, as well as his talismans. be carefull NOT to use his talismans as the "bread and butter" of your fighting arsenal. Guardian EASILY disarmed you of that and had you not had several of your runes on your person, what would you have done then? try to build up more of a catalogue of "spells" for him to ignite as well as giving him some magickal effects such as "mystic force bolts with a high level of concussive power" ..things that DONT require a spell to be cast.
ALSO, give the character a sense of hand to hand combat or at least a whip, a set of daggers. he needs to be able to be fast on his feet and able to fight up close and personal..not just with magick. he could carry a potion that augments strength (i can give you a work up for that potion if you want) to give him more "power" in his physical attacks. you're a military man so incorporate your own fighting knowledge into the character to make him more formidable in hand to hand combat.
and finally PERSONALITY- again... a character has to be known for more than his powers. what makes Miracle stand out from any other magick user? In the Six , my character Spellbinder is the "powerfull, lethal edged witch who hides her emotional core " and Guardian's character is the "cold, brutal , efficicent witch who makes people wonder if she even HAS emotions." Both women are similar but posses KEY differences that help them to stand out as do ALL the members of the Six. Again..this is the chance for you to make this character in a way that you will "care" about them and WANT to use them. dont make a character to suit OTHER people's ideas...do it for YOUR pleasure.
When you play in an rpg such as "The Six" where there is so much room for personal creativity, there also comes witht hat a responsibility for you to USE that creativity and show initiative when playing your character so that you add something to the game that cant be replaced and make yourself valuable to the team in such a way that your absence is noted. You must know what is going on in the game, read up on the past stories, and bios of all your cast mates, know their abilities so you may be able to do something like a "tag team" with a team mate when fighting a foe based on the powers of the team mate you choose, or you might be able to discover a clever "round about way" of defeating a foe using logic, creativity and imagination. You dont need to wait on the direction of a "GM"(gaming director/master) to maximize your character or expand on ideas you have about your character, NOR should you have to be told WHEN/HOW to post.. and i think you defiantely were "limited" in the use of Miracle in this audition because you werent used to having as much FREEDOM to use the charater and maximize his potential.
Ultimately, I like Miracle (as did at least one other member who gave you a good karma rating in your first post). He's unique, and has alot of potential all he needs is to be "fleshed out" in some areas.
Thank you for participating in this audition
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